“Story is pretty good, but the writer(s) need to realize there are other ways to indicate who is speaking than ‘so and so said.’ It’s distracting at first, quickly moving to annoying, then to, ‘I wonder what else I could listen to?’ I said.
Questions can be changed to ‘Sal asked’ or ‘Sal inquired’. Rebukes can be ‘Sal retorted!’ Etc.
Please pick up a thesaurus and find dozens of other words besides said. It sounded like a 3rd grader wrote it.”
brad in Omaha via Apple Podcasts ·
United States of America ·
05/12/23