“The story line isn't bad, it really isn't. The reading isn't great but I've heard worse and made it through the entire story. You really need to get an editor tho. If I hear you say the entire name "Alavan's Wizards and Witches Corner Store" one more time I'm going to have a complete fit. It's ANNOYING. You can say "the store" or "Alavan's" or "the Corner Store". We get it, we are not brain dead. So pull it together. Stop saying Alavans Wizards and Witches Corner Store three times in a paragraph. Even saying Alavan's Wizards and Witches Corner Store more than once every couple of pages is too much. So stop saying Alavan's Wizards and Witches Corner Store all the time. (See annoying isn't it???)”
Ticky99 via Apple Podcasts ·
United States of America ·
02/23/11